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Daily Writing Challenge Reflection on Revision

    Within the revisions, I added more details to the experience I have with coffee. I explained the coffee as my "warm blanket" and expanded on how it made me feel. The peer that I did the revisions with recommended to organize the writing more and make it more of a story. To do this, I started in the early morning and described the routine that I follow. As a morning person, I enjoy keeping things simple and relaxing. In order to add a negative side to the story, I discussed how coffee or this blanket of warmth can stain with just one touch. If there was anything that I could change about my "warm blanket" it would be that I could wear white without fear on the way to school. I also went into detail about what I do if I am heading to an 8am and have no time to make a fresh cup of coffee. It was important to mention the word "addiction" because it does make me the morning person that I strive to be although I would not say I am necessarily proud of that. I am proud and somewhat passionate about coffee which many consider silly. But the distinct taste of a black coffee comes with tons of enjoyment for me, it is my preferred drink when I need caffeine. I added details about how I do not like a certain taste of coffee but sometimes it is the only choice. This was a little obstacle that I wanted to add to my metaphor story. To make it relatable to some, I added a little dialect at the local coffee shop that I go to, the experience of the shop makes the coffee even tastier. Although it sounds like something you would see in a movie or TV show, that is quite literally how a lot of my mornings or visits go.


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