Within the revisions, I added more details to the experience I have with coffee. I explained the coffee as my "warm blanket" and expanded on how it made me feel. The peer that I did the revisions with recommended to organize the writing more and make it more of a story. To do this, I started in the early morning and described the routine that I follow. As a morning person, I enjoy keeping things simple and relaxing. In order to add a negative side to the story, I discussed how coffee or this blanket of warmth can stain with just one touch. If there was anything that I could change about my "warm blanket" it would be that I could wear white without fear on the way to school. I also went into detail about what I do if I am heading to an 8am and have no time to make a fresh cup of coffee. It was important to mention the word "addiction" because it does make me the morning person that I strive to be although I would not say I am necessarily proud of that. I am proud and somewhat passionate about coffee which many consider silly. But the distinct taste of a black coffee comes with tons of enjoyment for me, it is my preferred drink when I need caffeine. I added details about how I do not like a certain taste of coffee but sometimes it is the only choice. This was a little obstacle that I wanted to add to my metaphor story. To make it relatable to some, I added a little dialect at the local coffee shop that I go to, the experience of the shop makes the coffee even tastier. Although it sounds like something you would see in a movie or TV show, that is quite literally how a lot of my mornings or visits go.
" In many ways storytellers are alchemists. What is storytelling?" In order to be a great storyteller then you need to be able to take a story and make it interesting. This is similar to how the alchemist was trying to turn regular metal into gold; this was because gold was worth more. If you can take a story that may be boring but tell it in a way that creates excitement / more worth then you can be considered an alchemist. The art of storytelling is hard, two people can tell the same story but the way it is told can elicit certain emotions that make the story way more interesting. The storyteller also understands the type of emotions that the audience is "here" for. Do they want to laugh, cry, or question the scene?
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