The sky holds so much information that I would be able to ramble on. The sky controls or takes part in our use of time. When it is light out, most of us are awake but when it is dark then most of us go to sleep. This is natural for us or so we think. This dates back as far as man can think and the creator himself designed it perfectly. The sky never fails to be unique yet consistent. Thanks to the sun, it is either light or dark outside depending on the fluffy clouds. The sky creates wonder, where does the sky lead to? We are staring off into space and the rest of our universe. Within the sky, we can see planets, planes, clouds, moons, or even meteorites. Nothing about the sky do we as humans control, except for the amount of pollution that we pump into the atmosphere. There is something calming about the sky and the lack of control. The sky helps control my mood for the day, however, even when it is raining I still feel joyful. The sky holes so many wonders that man will never answer.
Within the revisions, I added more details to the experience I have with coffee. I explained the coffee as my "warm blanket" and expanded on how it made me feel. The peer that I did the revisions with recommended to organize the writing more and make it more of a story. To do this, I started in the early morning and described the routine that I follow. As a morning person, I enjoy keeping things simple and relaxing. In order to add a negative side to the story, I discussed how coffee or this blanket of warmth can stain with just one touch. If there was anything that I could change about my "warm blanket" it would be that I could wear white without fear on the way to school. I also went into detail about what I do if I am heading to an 8am and have no time to make a fresh cup of coffee. It was important to mention the word "addiction" because it does make me the morning person that I strive to be although I would not say I am necessarily proud
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